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Tom is a student, this is his rules in a day. He gets up at six o'clock and go to school at six past fiftheen. He never eats breakfast at outside. Tom's school life only has study. He doesn't listen to music on school days and doesn't watch TV on school nights. Every day Tom is back home by tweleve o'clock and by nine past twenty in the evening. This is Tom's a day.