单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少。
Tom is a student and this is his rule in a day. He gets up at six o'clock and goes to school at six past fifteenth. He never has breakfast on the outside. Tom's school life only has book. He doesn't listen to music on school days and doesn't watch TV on school nights. Every day Tom is back home by twelve o'clock and by nine past twenty in the evening. This is that Tom's a day.