正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;单词拼写做的不错,文中词汇表达贫乏;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少。
Our monitor is a very beautiful girl. Her name is H. She is twelve years old. She has big eyes and a small mouth. She likes smile and has a warm heart. She is a little girl that looks like a delicate doll. She always dresses the school-clothes. The school-clothes is white and black. It's very simple.