可适当增加从句的使用;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;文中词汇表达丰富度要加强,同时要注意单词拼写。
Yesterday I was very busy. I got up early and took bus to my frend's school. She is my best frend, not one of. When I met her at ten o'clock that means I spended three hours to take bus. But I was happyness that moment. Maybe four o'clock p.m. I back to my school by bus. At seven o'clock, I remember to do my homework that handed it in my tearcher last week. I was tired and hungry, but I must do it. What a busy day, I had.