句式变化较为丰富;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累;作者词汇量偏小,且文章中拼写错误较多。
sam get up at six o'clock yesterday ,then go to park by bike, he play very happy.he go to mc dongald's have lunch with parens at the midday parents, he go to basketball with classmate ,from at 16:00 to at 18:00.after supper ,sam with father go for a walk,his father give a CD. this today ,sam the day live very happy.