文中用词稍显贫乏,单词拼写还要加强;从句过少,且需注意文中个别句子错误;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累。
Sam get up at six o'clock yesterday ,Then go to park by bike, he play very happy.he go to mcdongald's have lunch with parents at the midday parents, he go to basketball with classmate ,from at 16:00 to at 18:00.After supper ,Sam go for a with his father ,his father give he a CD.This today,Sam have a good time .