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It was a sunny today。In the morning he got up at 6 o 'clock and then he ride on a bicycle to the park ,so happly was he 。At the noon ,he went to MConald’s with his parents to have a lunch。In the afternoon,sam piayed the basketball with his classm at school ,until 6 o‘clock 。After dinner ,sam and father went for a walk and father bought a CD to him ,It is fun day for sam