希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
Yesterday I was very busy. I got up early and took bus to my friend's school. She is my best friend, not one of. When I met her at ten o'clock that means I took three hours time to take the bus. But I was happy to meet her when I have time. Maybe four o'clock p.m. I back to my school by bus. At seven o'clock, I remembered to do my homework that handed it in my teacher last week. I was tired and hungry, but I must do it. What a busy day, I had.