加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文中用词稍显贫乏,单词拼写方面也要加强;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累。
I have a good friend. She is a beautiful and clever girl. And she has long black hair. Two big black eyes and a red mouth. voice is better. She is good at singing. She hoby likes reading books. Playing computer games and chess. She's also nice person. She at everyday often helps us. Our classmates like her very much.