作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰。
I have a good friend. She is a beautiful and clever girl. She has long black hair. Two big black eyes and a red mouth. voice is better. She is good at singing. She hobby like read books. Play computer games and chess. She's also nice person. She at everyday often helps us. Our classmates like her very much.