正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;上下文衔接稍显不流畅。
Someone says that eyes are windows of people's heart. So we need protect our eyes. Now everyone likes to use the microphone. It makes our eyes become very tired. I think we must decrease time that usees our microphone. But not only to use phone but also to use our eyes with wrong means. So we need study some right skills to protect our eyes, such eyes exercise and proper our reading the posture.