可适当增加从句和长句的使用;文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
I have many dreams and they are my hopes about future. I want to become a man that has many skills. I want to see all around the word and I need take happiness to everyone. And I want to make more money. I think it's not a problem which can resolve by the money. I like reading books, so I want to have a books' and make other people come in and read they not give me money.