词汇表达不够丰富,要增加高级词汇的使用;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
My Net Friend I have a net friend. We meet each other through the computer. She is a very funny girl. She like read books and communicate her thinks about these books. She is so interested that often talk me multifarious jokes. We always ourselves life, happiness or sadness. Sometimes we can go very far to see. She is my net friend.