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Yesterday,Sam had a very pleasant day with her parents.What did they do,the most surprising thing about it,however,was that she met a strange thing that she had never seen it.She got up early in the morning and washed quickly and then she went to a public park by bicycle.She enjoyed herself too much. After having a good time,she had an appointment with her family at McDonald's.On arriving went there,her parents were waiting for her for a long time.They had lunch together.From four o'clock till six o'clock,she played games on the playground.At that time,she nearly hurt herself,finally,she was all right.Her classmates advised her that she had better do not that any more.She came back home while her mother was cooking a meal for her and her father was reading newspaper in the living room.Her father would like to go for a walk after dinner,Sam agreed.The father bought her a classic CD player.She was really happy yesterday.What a pleasant day!
