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Sam got up at six o’clock yesterday. Then he went to park on bike. He played very happy in park. At noon, he had a lunch with his parents at McDonald’s. He played basketball with his classmates from four to six. It very funning. After dinner, he went for a walk with his father, his father buyed a musical CD for him. This is a fun day to Sam.