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sam got up at six yesterday,then went to the park by bike and had a good time there.He had a lunch at the McDonald's with his friend.Sam played basketball at school with his classmates in the afternoon,and they had played from four o'clock till six o'clock in the afternoon.Sam went for a walk with his father after dinner,his father bought a class CD for him.How interesting a day Sam was!