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I want to make a Chinese penpal. Hello, my name is Lucy King,13 years old,from the UK,I speak English,my favorate hobbies is sports,music,movies.I love China and like to know more about China ,so I hope to find a Chinese girl as penpal whom has same hobbies like me and I could learn Chinese with.