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How To Protect Our Eyes Eyeryone knows that eyes are one of the most important parts of our body.Having good eyesight means we can not only see things clearly,but also enjoy some beautiful scenes.there is also a saying going that eyes are the window of our mind.But how can we protect our eyes? Here are some tips for you .Fistly, it is a good habits not to read your books or newspapers for a long time because our eyes need rest,too.Secondly,don't read books in a strong or poor light,otherwise,the light would harm our eyes.At last,remember to keep on doing eye-exercises and watch more green grass and other plants.