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从句使用不足，建议增加长句和复杂句的使用；不能熟练使用过渡词，文章结构欠佳；作者能词汇表达较准确熟练，但请仔细检查词汇的拼写。
Dear Sigmund， My name is Liu Hong. I’m a Grade 9 student in No 2 Middle School. I am not good,study is full in my live, I’ve never had a free time,but I like cosplay very well,this is my only hobby, I often tall about cospaly with my friend after school. Cospaly spent much in my free time ,so I can’t finish my homework in time,my teatch was very pleased,he picked me on sometime. My Achievement is better bad,parsents and my teatch asked me to give up cospaly,my only hobby,I’m very no happly,what can I do.can you give me some idea I hope to hear from you soon. Best wishes! Yours, Liu Hong
