采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;文中从句数量过少;文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了。
I have a good friend and he is my best friend and he's name is Li-wei Bo.He likes watches TV very much but he does not like to learn but he is Mai-hong Ting teacher's(she was my first grade teacher) son. I often playing with him and sometimes I fight with him(play),I play with him very happy.He is two years younger than me and I'm ten years old this year and he is eight years old this year. I love him very much but he doesn't like me.