单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;文章上下文衔接自然。
I have a pet and she is a penguin(she is"QQ pet").She was thirty,but she‘s been on for two years.She had a birthday month and her birthday is on the first day of a month. And she is also a game,my favourite game is she(because she is“QQ pet”).She usually calls me“master”. 我有一只宠物,她是一只企鹅(她是“QQ宠物”)。她三十级了,但是她才开了两年。她的生日在一月,她的生日是每个月的第一天。 她也是一个游戏,我最喜欢的游戏就是她(因为她是“QQ宠物)。她通常叫我“主人”。