单词拼写做的不错,文中词汇表达贫乏;句式多变,多多练习从句的使用;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
Yesterday was a good day,sam was wake up early at six o'clock,he by bike to park,he have fun in the park.he and his partner have lunch in McDonald 's ,at afternoon,he play basketball with his classmates,since four o'clock to six o'clock,after dinner,sam and father go for a walk,his father buy a CD for he.this day was a funny day.