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My favorite sport is playing football. I fell in love with football by chance. From that time, my dream is become a professional player. It was on my way home that I picked a football after classes. Then I play the football with my classmates, which we found it's very interesting. So we always play football together, and competed with each other. The more I play football, the deeper I love. About the football stars, I like Bikerham best, whom I want to be.