单词拼写做的不错,文中词汇表达贫乏;衔接成分偏少;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意文中的句子错误;连词使用偏少。
Palying football is my favourite bobby. I falled in love with football by chance.on an usual day I picked up a football on my way home,and my friends and me began to play it,from then I began to love playing football.I often play football with my friends and we were training together. The favourite football player in my deep heart is ~.I always want to be a professional football player in the future