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Palying football is my favourite bobby. By chance,I fell in love with football.on a usual day I picked up a football on my way home,and my friends and me began to play it,and from then I began to love playing football.Since then I often play football with my friends and we were training together. The favourite football player in my deep heart is Bick.I always look forward to being a professional football player like Bick in the future.