文章衔接手法恰当;作者词汇量偏少,不过单词拼写方面做的不错;可适当增加从句的使用,注意几处句子错误。
Palying football is my favourite bobby. By chance,I fell in love with football.on a usual day I picked up a football on my way home,and my friends and me began to play it,and from then I began to love playing football.Since then I often play football with my friends and we were training together. The favourite football player in my deep heart is Bick.I always look forward to being a professional football player like Bick in the future,and I will be training harder from now to come ture my dream.