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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then,he went to park by bike.And he was very happy in park.He had lunch with his parents in McDonal's.At afternoon,Sam and his classmates played blackball from four o'clock to six o'oclock in school.After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father.His father selt a classical music CD to he. Sam had a fun day.