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Dear Tom, How are you? As your last letter that you want to know something about Mid-Autumn Day in China. Now let me introduce it to you. The mid autumn festival falls on 15th in eighth month in Chinese lunar calendar. As one of Chinese traditional festival, it has been enjoying great popularity in China. On that day, no matter how far and how busy the people are, they will go home to have dinner with family members. The moon at that night is the brightest among the month. So after dinner, all the family members will seat together to enjoy the scenery with the delicious moon cakes. Sometimes the older people will tell us the older stories, which are welcomed to children. This mid-autumn festival, we looking forward to your coming. Yours Lihua