拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意个别句子错误;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
As China become more and more important in the world communication, people are asked to improve the quality in behavior. Because the civilized behavior play an important part in international communication. In our daily life, I notice some rude uncivilized behaviors which many people think those are common. Such as, some people spit in the public places. Some people speak loudly in reading room as if the world is his. What's more, some people run for the seats on buses, ignoring the old people and the children. As for me, I think our personal behavior is behalf our country's education quality. So it is urgently to improve our citizens' quality. First, we should be inspected others. Second, we should observe the rules.