作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文章结构欠严谨,基本没有衔接成分。
Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday.After, he went to the park by bike.He played very happy at park.On the noon, he ate lunch with his parents at McDonald's. In the afternoon, he played basketball with his students at school. they played from 4PM till 6PM. After the dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father.Father bought a classical music CD for him.What a interesting day!