句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文中词汇表达多样性不足,在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨。
I have a good friend. Her name is shelly. We met on the high school. We are graduation from a same school and get into different high school,but it doesn't influence our friendship. I am not good at communicating with a person, but when your meet a person who is right,you needn't do anything that your will be attracted by each other.