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Sam was get up on 6 o'clock yestoday. Then ride a bike to go to the park,he was happy in park. noon with parents eat lunch at McDoald's.On the Afternoon sam playing basketball with his classmates at school,from am 4 o'clock till am 6 o'clock.After dinner, go for a walk with farther,his farther bought him a piece of classical music CD.That day sam had fun!