文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;简单句型过多,从句使用不熟练;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
I have a pet dog. It is pretty cute. It has two big eyes, a small nose, white clean hairs. It has company with me for many years. I took it for walking every day. We usually live and play together. When I went to school, he stays at home and wait for me.He is both clever and intelligent.He didn't make the mess. We always play ball games when I came back home after school. He likes to play football with me in the yard, and that is our happy hours for every day. He is considerable. When I was ill, he took a cup of water for me. I have moved at that moment. As for me, he is not only a pet dog, but also my family or my close friend.I love it extremely.