作者有一定功底,可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
My favorite sport is playing the soccer.It is by chance that I like to play the soccer,it was in my boyhood,someday on my way back home,I picked a football,then I played it with my friends, from then on I loved playing the soccer.I usually train and have match with my classmates.My favorite soccer star is Beichanm who is from England.I wish I could become a professional football player in the future.At the same time, I wish our national football team could play better and better,one day, they can rush out Asia,step to the world,and then,all people of the country will be happy for it.I wish that day come earlier.