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Sam got up in sis yesterday. Then he went to the park by bickle. He played very well in the park. He and his parents had lunch in McDonald's. Sam went to play bastetball from four to six in afternoon. Sam went for a walk with his father after dinner. His father bought a classes of music CD. what's a funny day for sam.