增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文中用词稍显贫乏,在词汇拼写也要再接再厉;层次欠清晰,衔接成分很少。
Sam got up at six yesterday morning. Afth that, he rode bike to the park. He had great funny playing in the park. At noon, h had lunch in McDonald's with his parents. In the afternoon, sam played basketball from four to six with classmates. It was relaing. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoys music very much. What a happy day Sam had!