增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文中用词稍显贫乏,有一些单词拼写错误;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少。
John is our monitor. He is 14- year-old. He has a round face and short black fair. He has two little eyes and he wears glasses. The glasses is red. John often wears blue jeans and a white T-shirt and ties a blue shirt round his waist . He is taller than most of our classmater. But he is a little overweight. John likes playing basket ball and running. He is interesting in drawing. He is a easygoing boy.