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Yesterday Sam got up at 6'clock,then he went to the park by bike.he hde a good time in the park.At the noon he had a lunch with his parents.He played basketball with his schoolmates from 4'clock to 6'clock at the afternoon.After supper dinner Sam went for a walk with his father.Father bought a CD which contains classical music for him.What a interesting day for Sam!