作者词汇量偏少,不过单词拼写方面做的不错;上下文衔接稍显不流畅;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用。
san got up at 6o'clock in the yesterday.And then goto the park by bike and he was very happy.when he was left the park,he ate lunch with his parent in the noon.In the afternoon,san played basketball with his classmate in the school until the 18o'clock.After the dinner,san went for a walk with his father who bought a classical music CD for sam.So,sam has a funny day