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Yestoday,Sam get up at 6:00 clock.Then,he rid his bicycle to go to the park,and he have a good time be there.He eat lunch at MCDonald's with parents at12:00 colock.Afternoon,Sam play basketball with students in the school,begin at PM 4:00 till PM 6:00.After breakfirst , his father and Sam go for a walk,then his father buy a classical CD.How fun this day it is!