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There are many photos in my room, but only one photo is very important to me. The photo is a Jim's family. Jim's family have three persons, Jim's father, mother and Jim. Jim's father is an engineer. He works in a famous factory. He is very tall and thin. He wares a white coat, blue trousers and brown shoes. He is in the left of the photo. Jim's mother is a nurse. She is very busy and always has worked until night. She saves many lifes. She is very beautiful. She is in the right of the photo. She wares a red skirt. Jim is in the middle of the photo. He studies at school and is my pupil. He wares a suit of sportsware.