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Sam got up on six o'clock yesterday.then he going to park by cycle,he is very happy.he and his parents have lunch in McDonald's.On the afternoon he and his classmate go to playing basketball from 4pm till 6pm.after dinner,Sam and his father go for a walk together,his father bought a classical music CD to him.Sam is so happy this day.