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Sam got up on six o'clock yesterday. Then he went to the park by bike, he is very happy. He and his parents had lunch in McDonald's.On the afternoon he played basketball with friends at 4pm till 6pm.after dinner,Sam and his father go for a walk together,his father bought a classical music CD to him.Sam is so happy this day.