单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;从句使用量太少;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少。
Tom is a good boy. He get up at six o'clock and go to school at 6:15 every day. He is always eat in home and don't outside. During the school, he never listen to music and watch TV. When he was off the school he arrived home at nine twenty. That's one day for Tom.