文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰。
Yesterday,Sam got up at 6:00 clock,then rode his bicycle to go to the park and he had a good time in there.He had a lunch with his parents.Afternoon,between PM 4:00 to PM 6:00,Sam had been playing basketball with his friends all the time.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father.His father bought a classical music CD.How fun this day it is!