文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰。
Yesterday, Sam got up at 6:00 o'clock, then rode his bicycle to go to the park and he had a good time there. He had lunch with his parents. In the afternoon, between PM 4:00 to PM 6:00, Sam had been playing basketball with his friends all the time. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical music CD. How fun this day it is!