文章结构严谨,有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用高级词汇;文中如若增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩。
Pen pal wanted Hello,my name is Lucy King and I'm thirteen years old. I want to make a pen pal friend who is a Chinese. We can communicate with English speaking or Chinese papers. Therefore, I can know much more about china because I'am interested in the traditions of China where have so many kind people and nice spots the same as learning Chinese. Meanwhile, you can understand what the UK look like. At last but not the least ,I hope my friend enjoy playing sports, listening to music, and go to the theatre to see the movies, likewise. That's all.