如果增加些复杂句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨。
I want a Pen pal Hello, my name is Lucy King and I'm thirteen years old. I want to make a pen pal friend who is Chinese. We can communicate with English speaking or Chinese papers. Therefore, I can know much more about China because I'm interested in the traditions of China where have so many kind people and nice spots the same as learning Chinese. Meanwhile, you can understand what the UK look like. Last but not least, I hope my friend enjoys playing sports, listening to music, and going to the theatre to see movies, likewise. That's all.