正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;作者词汇量偏小,另外文章有些单词拼写错误;建议增加衔接词和过渡词的使用。
We lived in downtown. I have a big beautiful garden. My house is in the center of the garden. My house have two floors. The first floor is a living room and a kitchen. There are many of furniture in my living room, such as TV, sofa, table and chair. My father, mother and I always watch TV in the livingroom at night. The kitchen is very small. My mother is cooking in the kitchen. The scend floor in bedroom. We have two bedrooms. One is my father's and mother's, the other is mine. The garden is around the house. There are many trees and flowers in my garden. It is very beautiful in the spring. On the summer evening, we sit under the tree and singing and dancing.