若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累。
Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday. And then he went to the park by bike and had a good fun in it. In the afternoon, he had a lunch with his parents in Mc Donald's. After that, he played basketball with his classmates from 4 o'clock to 6 o'clock. He went for a walk with his father after lunch and he his father bought a classic much CD for him. What a funny day Sam had.